Monthly Archives: May 2010

Chapter 4 – Scene One is now posted

Hello Alpheans!

Thank you for your patience! Though the latest installment is short, I hope you will find it to be worth the wait.

For anyone who cannot access the pages, email me. I’ll make sure you have access.

Oh, by the way, this is not the same material that I was complaining about in a recent post. I’ve moved that material to a later scene.


A working weekend?

Hello Alpheans,

I’ve been trying to get as much writing as possible in this weekend, but I haven’t made as much progress as I would have liked. I did get some serious writing done early on in the weekend, but I felt a need to get back to some research I had been putting off and that kept me from finishing the first scene of Chapter 4. In fact, I’m not really liking much about the way the first scene of Chapter 4 is going. I like much of the dialogue, but it’s extremely dialogue heavy. I’m really dissatisfied with the way I’m presenting this dialogue to the reader, but I’m considering just leaving it for now and addressing it in editing. When I finish the pile of crap that is Chapter 4 – Scene One, if you all can let me know in which precise ways it sucks it would be very helpful for me to be able to add that to my editing notes so I have some ideas to work with when I get to edit it later.

Thanking you all in advance,

Chapter 3 – Scene Three — I FINALLY finished it!

Hello Alpheans!

I used up all my words writing the third scene of Chapter 3 so this will be short and to the point. I’ve been awake almost 24 hours straight and I’m totally wiped out. I’m going to crash and I hope to find little easter eggs of feedback on this when I wake up. Love y’all. Nitey-nite, now.

Format of all “Mortality, Interrupted” pages updated!

Hello, Alpheans!

The British have a popular phrase: “Exactly what it says on the tin”. And I couldn’t help but think of that when deciding what to write in this post. 🙂

Some of you had mentioned to me that you found it difficult to read the text on the site’s web pages, particularly where the various scenes of “Mortality, Interrupted” are posted. That was a primary reason for the poll about using a different template for the site, as you may know. The template I’m using doesn’t allow me to change the size of the text in the options. I was stuck with what the template offered. So, since I decided to follow the results of the poll and keep the current theme, I had to find another way to make it more readable.

Doing some digging, I noticed that I could use the less ‘user-friendly’ method of adding text with HTML (the original formatting language of the internet). All I had to do, then, was research the HTML codes that would render the text larger and “voila!” I could increase the text size! So, that’s what I did. Then it was just a matter of going back to all of the “Mortality, Interrupted” pages and manually adding the codes to every paragraph block of every page. And I did that. Because that’s how much I love every single one of you. *lol*

Seriously, though, it was a lot of work and I just got finished spending the past 5 hours updating every page. I hope it makes a difference and helps to make the story more readable. I hope to have the final scene of chapter 3 written by the end of the weekend.

Thanks everyone! Let me know if it works better.

Chapter 3 – Scene Two – revised and posted!

PLEASE tell me I improved it. (Unless you don’t think so, and then please tell me that, too.) I took a bit of a leap here and I really poured myself into this scene.

Chapter 3 – Scene One (NEW!!)

Hello Alpheans!

I just posted the newly revised Chapter 3 – Scene One! I can’t wait to hear what you all think!

Chapter 2 – Scene Three Updated

The first edit is finished and posted. The angry argument has been removed from the scene. It will reappear later in the story.

The full site is now live – and locked down

Hello Alpheans!

I want to express my heartfelt thanks to Denise, Rob, Marsha, and Nonie who braved the rigorous (not really) process of creating a WordPress account so that they could continue to read my writing. I’m now able to lock down the site and make the writing content visible and accessible again. I’m still working on the edits for Chapters 3 & 4… well that’s what they were called, now they’re Chapters 2 & 3 after making Chapter 1 the new Prologue and renumbering all of the chapters accordingly. I’ll post them as I finish them. Be on the lookout for update messages.

A new workshop, a fresh perspective, and a bit of sausage

Greetings, Alpheans!

I went to a new workshop tonight, the Palm Harbor School of the Novel. It was their second monthly meeting. They have a couple of writers who have previously been published, so their perspective will be extremely valuable. We each had an opportunity to read five pages of our writing if we wished, and me being the approval-seeking whore that I am… I wished. I read the first scene of Chapter One, that being approximately five double-spaced pages of material. The feedback I got was generally good. Some of my research was questioned, which was fair. My writing was well-received, particularly my concise use of dialogue, which I appreciated. The best suggestion I received was something that at once surprised me and relieved me. I’m going back to the Prologue idea, but with just the two scenes of Chapter One being the Prologue. What is currently Chapter Two will be the new Chapter One. This will also introduce the central character in Chapter One, which is as it should be. Sorry about the changing of things (again), but that’s what happens during the draft stage of writing. It’s kinda like making sausage.

“Mortality, Interrupted” storyline under construction

Hello Alpheans!

I’d been trying to write the final scene of Chapter 3 and having some trouble. While discussing the book with Denise, she mentioned a couple of things in the way of criticism that were really helpful. One was that in several scenes I either mention or outright focus on the death of Charles and Eva’s daughter Elizabeth. To me, each mention of it made sense, added to the story, and fit where I put it. But Denise turned out to be right, too. It was a bit of overkill to keep bringing it up in scene after scene. The problem was a storyline structure that naturally and repeatedly hearkened back to the Goodmans’ tragedy. While Denise and I were discussing this, it also occurred to me that while Eva is reacting naturally to the events in each scene, I’m missing an opportunity to show the descent of her mental and emotional stability in a natural progression.

So, I’m rewriting the story from the end of the last scene of Chapter 2 onward. I’m re-using as much of the material as possible, but with some careful rearranging of things and adding some new material I’m hoping that I can address the problem Denise highlighted and create a sequence of events for Eva to naturally react to which will show a steady deterioration of her grasp of reality.

With some excellent criticism, the story is going to have a chance to become stronger and better! Thank you, Denise!