Just a quick note to let everyone know that I’ve finished formatting the new scene for the web. Also, I decided to split the scene in two (as you probably noticed), putting the split at the change of setting from Várfalva to the orphanage. That should cut down on the length and also provide a logical break. Let me know if that helps it read better.
It’s hard to know (or feel certain) how a story will come off the page from the reader’s perspective when you’re the one who wrote it. Your impressions and insights are worth gold to me, so please don’t hold back.
Thanks a million. Y’all rock!