Monthly Archives: January 2013

First part of Chapter 3 – Scene Three posted

Hello all,

You’ve all been so patient and uncomplaining about having to wait for this scene that I decided to go ahead and post what I have of it so far since I’ve arrived at a ‘pause point’ in composing the draft. This should give you all some idea of where Serena’s storyline is heading, or at least the tenor of it; at least enough to be able to start considering the question I asked a few days ago regarding the novel’s storylines and what (if anything) should be done about Serena’s part in the first book of the trilogy.

Thanks again for all you do for me! Now I’m off to bed before I make myself too exhausted to work tomorrow.


Making steady progess on Serena’s third scene (Chaper Three – Scene 3)

Hey all,

Thanks for hanging with me. This scene is proving difficult to write. It’s coming to me in jumbled fashion and I’m having to constantly reconstruct it as I go just to make it have any linear sense. This is taking time, so I am very appreciative of y’all’s patience as I slowly extract this beast of a scene from my Muse. I do, however, expect to have it done in a time frame of about two to three days.

Thanks so much, everyone!

I’m so busy!!

Hey folks!

So sorry that I haven’t gotten Scene Three of Chapter 3 posted yet, but I’ve been so busy with work and all that I haven’t gotten very far into writing it. I do have a couple of paragraphs written, I like them, and I have a good sense of where I’m going with the scene, but I just haven’t gotten very many words on the screen yet.

The good news is that the reason for this is that I’ve been busy with work – as in, a job. 🙂 It’s just delivering food for a local Italian restaurant (which has GREAT food, by the way), but it IS a job and I feel very blessed to have it.

I also have a busy weekend coming up so I’m not sure if I’ll have anything to post by the weekend, but I won’t be working next until Wednesday so I should hopefully have something posted by then.

Thanks for your understanding, everyone!

About the final scene of Chapter 3 and an important question…

Hey all,

I’m currently working on the final scene of Chapter 3, and in this scene we’ll return to what’s going on with Serena. You may recall that she disappeared at the end of her last scene in the middle of chapter 2. In chapter 3 we will learn where she went and perhaps glimpse some of the impending ramifications of that.

This leads to an important question I would like you to give me feedback on, and here is where my thinking is…

In my overall plot, referring to the entire 3-book story arc, the storylines for Serena and Kara are not designed to fully converge until somewhere in the third and final book, and probably toward the end of that book. I’m beginning to suspect that it might be a mistake, structurally, to have the reader follow two different primary characters (Kara and Serena) through two entire books and most of the third before their storylines finally come together for the trilogy’s climactic scenes.

Once I’ve posted this scene of Serena’s which is coming soon, I’d like you all to read it while thinking of this question…

One alternative I’m considering is to leave Serena out of the first book entirely and introduce her in the second book (in the same way that I’ve introduced here in this draft). That way, the first book can focus more on Kara and Gorman. If I do that, Kara will be seen as the sole protagonist character of the trilogy and Gorman will be the supreme antagonist. Serena will remain a very important character to the story, but will become more of a strong, supporting role, which could be advantageous.

Another alternative is to leave her out of the trilogy altogether and allow that entire plot to focus exclusively upon Kara and Gorman. It’s possible that Serena, being such a strong character in her own right, might shine best if she’s given her own spotlight, her own trilogy separate from Kara’s, where she can be just as heroic (or villainous as the case may be).

Three different ideas:

  1. Continue this structure with Kara and Serena as co-protagonists from the start, dealing with their own struggles which lead inexorably to a final confrontation with the antagonist.
  2. Change the structure to give Kara the complete focus in the first novel and have her share the spotlight with Serena in the second, then build to a final confrontation with the antagonist.
  3. Give Kara the entire focus throughout the trilogy and have the final confrontation be between just Kara and the antagonist at the trilogy’s conclusion, then start a new series focusing exclusively on Serena who faces her own antagonist.

After I post this next scene of Serena’s (in the next day or so) please let me know what you think.


Big scene finished! And it has FIRE!!!

Hey all,

Finished that big scene I’ve been working on all day and it’s right here: Chapter 3 – Scene Two. I do feel it’s important to reiterate that what I’m trying to do this time around with the draft is just getting the plot laid down. That’s it. No frills here, not trying to win any awards with the writing of the draft. Just getting the plot down. I can make pretty prose later.

Thanks all for your continued support and encouragement. It truly keeps me going!

Update: Working on a big scene – about half finished

Hey all,

I’m working on a big, important scene in Gorman’s storyline and I’ve gotten about halfway through it, I think. I’m looking forward to getting it finished as well as the scene which will follow this where Gorman’s manipulation of the events will be revealed to the reader. I just hope it comes off the page as cool as it seems in my head. If there’s anything I worry about, it’s that.

At any rate, I have a weekly meeting to get to so I’m about to go and have some social time. Hopefully, I’ll get more written tonight. I’m working two shifts tomorrow and Friday, so the more I can get finished tonight, the better off I’ll be. I would LOVE to get this posted tonight. 🙂

Then, I have the next scene in Serena’s storyline to write and once that is done, the first three chapters will be done! I like the sound of that.

Did I not tell you?! The first scene of Chapter 3 is now posted. (And I need BETAS!)

Hey all,

Chapter 3 – Scene One is now posted! This scene picks back up with Kara on the road with Earnest’s traveling troupe of players. We get a bit more of a description of each than we got in the brief glimpses of them in the previous chapter and hopefully I’ve set the stage properly for what’s to come next.

Just so you all are aware, this is the last chapter I will be posting for access by the general public. Once the rest of the chapter is posted, all subsequent material will only be made available to my beta readers. If you would like to be one of my beta readers, please email me at

What am I looking for in my beta readers?

First of all, you do not have to be a writer to be a beta reader. I’m looking for a good mix of both writers and readers. It’s true that writers can often give more detailed feedback and can even provide helpful suggestions along the way. That’s why I want writers among my beta readers. But people who exclusively read are just as important because people who purely read books and don’t have anything to do with writing them are better able to tell me some of the most important things, and that’s how the writing reads to a broad audience. If I’m ever published, I certainly hope my book isn’t only purchased and liked by writers. I’ll starve! *LOL* Only those who read books for the sheer enjoyment of reading will be able to tell me how I’m doing on that score, so readers, please don’t think I don’t need you. I need you most of all, and I hope you’ll ask.

Those of you who ask to be a beta reader will be asked to submit a short critique of the first three chapters. You don’t have to go crazy with this – just a general opinion on what you think and why will be just fine – and no, if you’re critical of what I’ve written, it will definitely NOT disqualify you! *LOL*

Those who are accepted as beta readers (and I’m hoping for somewhere between six and ten) will be emailed a password which they will be able to use to access my draft beyond Chapter 3.

Thanks in advance!

Now that the holidays are over, it’s back to work – and LOOK!

Yes, I have a short scene to add to the gradually-growing draft. And yes, as I alluded to in the title, now that the hustle-and-bustle holidays are over I expect to be adding to the draft with much greater frequency. Here is the shortcut for those who are eager to have a look: Chapter 2 – Scene Three

Hope you enjoy! More to come as I’ve already started on Chaper 3!